Wednesday, June 13, 2007

Fantasy Love

You came into my dream last night
into my bed in the warm dark,
familiar and sweet in my arms
like a long forgotten childhood toy.

Our mouths tasted of fresh water
in gardens where cripples learn to walk again.
I followed you into forests
beneath the pink dusk.

When my husband came in
I was afraid he would discover you,
but I felt the cold as you left.

At daylight a page of your words,
black rounded script on white paper,
was taped to my mirror -

'I love you' written in a way
only I would be able to read.


Blogger sparrow said...

i love this! the idea of secret script and a clandestine affair, honestly, this took my breath away. beautiful!

2:04 PM  
Blogger Chris Never said...

This is awesome Moon.

Beautiful beautiful

3:10 PM  
Blogger burning moon said...

Thank you both. It is a true dream. I wasn't sure it would really make a poem ... still am not sure it does ... but it seemed to be important in some way. Perhaps simply because it was so vivid?

lol, I've been reading Katherine Mansfield's journals and letters again this morning and I sound like her now, lol.

3:23 PM  
Blogger sparrow said...

i can't find time to read mansfield... but desparately want to... can you recommend a good place to start??

as for the way your dream translates to poetry, the word you used was the word i couldn't find: "vivid". this writing is luminescent. vivid. i didn't know until now that it was an actual dream, but the fact that you saw these things makes sense. there was a sense to me that you weren't just writing, you were reliving. still takes my breath away every time!

6:57 AM  
Blogger burning moon said...

hi sparrow, Katherine Mansfield was a short story writer, so you can read some of her work without taking a lot of time.
The most remarkable thing about her writing, for me, is its simplicity and freshness. Even now, when so many of her contemporaries (D.H. Lawrence for example) sound dated, she still seems fresh.

The Garden Party is onlibe here:

3:16 PM  
Blogger sparrow said...

thanks moon! i am checking the link as we speak!

10:40 PM  

Post a Comment

<< Home