You have to be willing to let go,
gather swirls of darkness about you,
shatter them with blades of light. Don't
hold tight to everyday
the way you always have.
Comma, conjunction, independent clause -
metaphors
apt and strictly in line,
lack the starbound staircase
upon which the mind will rise
en pointe
and claim the stage
in a rage of spotlights. Engage
a speeding train, the rhythm of machine, ship,
with clouds of sail scudding taut bright
above the waves
the way words skim the vacant page
and paint with flair
a vibrant image there.
gather swirls of darkness about you,
shatter them with blades of light. Don't
hold tight to everyday
the way you always have.
Comma, conjunction, independent clause -
metaphors
apt and strictly in line,
lack the starbound staircase
upon which the mind will rise
en pointe
and claim the stage
in a rage of spotlights. Engage
a speeding train, the rhythm of machine, ship,
with clouds of sail scudding taut bright
above the waves
the way words skim the vacant page
and paint with flair
a vibrant image there.
posted by burning moon at 6:43 PM
2 Comments:
You have to be willing to let go
I think this simple statement has become the biggest single impedement to my writing now, I simply cannot let go, cannot allow myself to fly anymore
*sigh*
On the upside, this is an excellent poem my friend *smile*
the way words skim the vacant page
Oh yes
yeah, I know what you mean. I think in part it has to do with learning about writing. It's hard not to get distracted by the technical aspects of the poem when you're writing, once you know what they are.
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