Saturday
is so nice
the smooth curves
dangerous swirl
advantageous
rest
a place in which to
and best
a party
or warm sand sea sun
fun
and no mins/hours/seconds
driving past sledgehammer
slow funeral
foreman managed
whip crack
to bend
beneath
the smooth curves
dangerous swirl
advantageous
rest
a place in which to
and best
a party
or warm sand sea sun
fun
and no mins/hours/seconds
driving past sledgehammer
slow funeral
foreman managed
whip crack
to bend
beneath
posted by burning moon at 3:34 PM
3 Comments:
Now try as I might, i could not get the rhythm of this piece to sit right in my head, the syncopation of it confuses me, I feel like I should get it, but Im missing something
I like the content, but is it a particular style perhaps that I am not familiar with perhaps? just curious mate
Maybe try it this way:
Saturday
is so nice.
The smooth curves,
dangerous swirl,
advantageous.
A place in which to
rest,
and best,
a party,
or warm sand, sea, sun,
fun.
And no foreman managed
mins/hours/seconds driving past
sledgehammer
slow
like a funeral.
No whip crack
to bend
beneath
yeap, that works better for me lol
clearly my poetic mind is a little rusty, I need things spelled out rofl
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